Opinions Wanted

[Grislygus]

Seeing as how there's an established art community here, I was hoping that I could get some insight and opinions into my latest portfolio piece.

http://img382.imageshack.us/img382/7762/ckleft9gq.th.png (http://img382.imageshack.us/my.php?image=ckleft9gq.png)http://img382.imageshack.us/img382/4233/ckright2en.th.png (http://img382.imageshack.us/my.php?image=ckright2en.png)

It's that shadows scene from Citizen Kane, if anyone's wondering. My main problem with it is the harsh white outline on the guy to the right. However, in the movie there's a thin halo of light around him, and that's hard to accomplish believably on paper. Any suggestions?

[Misdemonar]

You kicked me ass :cry

[Grislygus]

In all fairness, it isn't a comic, so it can't be compared.

[DOOM2099]

Wow, man. I can't even critique this! You are a very talented dude.

[Grislygus]

Awright, got a tablet recently, and I tried it out.

Large Image (zoom in) (http://i111.photobucket.com/albums/n157/grislygus/BarkattheMoon.gif)

Any nitpicking or criticisms are more than welcome. If you see any problems with technique, composition, etc (especially composition), let me know.