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Originally Posted by The Leader
No no no, Boogie can write articles on here, but he clearly doesn't understand the finer points of story telling. I mean, your allegory for court corruption and authority figure's exploitation of those they should protect conjures so much more meaning when you find the boy brutalized by his fellow man. It helps the reader to identify your social commentary and on top of that it's beautiful.
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What would your take on this be? I wrote this a while back after seeing No Country for old men. Pub says my stuff is better read while intoxicated and I would like that you read it as though you are taking an audition for a part in a movie so take it slow and not as though you are reading a comic book.
Iceland 1988 a young man has been driving for hours to get from one frozen town to another. His car has broken down and he's walking, when a car stops to pick him up
Oddgier (the vehicle pulls up beside him with the window down)
Ogger do oogger?
Friormar
Obal do Obal oooken dobol bon fogal
Oddgier
Blocken du Engrish?
Friormar
Sure I speak English
Oddgier
I ran out of gas could you help me?
Friormar (pull out a Potato gun and shoots Oddgier in the head knocking him out and then drags him into an Icelandic field)
Oddgier (wakes up with his pants down around his ankles alone)
Obel du fuggle!!!!
Oddgier makes his way to the road and another car pulls up but this time is a very beautiful young girl that offers him a ride to safety
Rakel
Raped?
Oddgier
Yes, I need a drink
Rakel
Yes, we will stop in my town of Rapendoutsider
Oddgier
I think I will walk
Rakel
Are you sure? you still need to walk through it
Oddgier (takes out a knife and holds it to his neck)
Ippel offen to poppen
Rakel
you are going to kill yourself?
Oddgier
Poppen!!!
Rakel (speeds up her car and smashes it head on into a telephone pole)
Oddgier walks away from the crash but Rakel is killed...another car pulls up beside the bloody Oddgier, the car with Rakel explodes into flames
Sigbjorn
Heloo offen do smacken droppen trouse?
Oddgier
Ok
Oddgier is raped again and the movie ends