[CaptainBubba]

Its a very familliar sounding fantasy theme. Man's corruption vs. the natural order of "goodness". It needs more development. From what you've given us here it doesn't have any distinguishing qualities because the concepts are too vague.

On the other hand it is an introduction to a larger story, so that vagueness could be in your favor if you're simply trying to arouse curiousity.

Its quite good, but I'd throw in a name of a character or two just to give it more substance.