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Join Date: Mar 2001
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Dec 17th, 2003, 01:35 PM
My fave from that batch is
"No matter your position on our "War on Terrorism", we can all admit that unless we are a terrorism expert or a part of the Bush cabinets, we don't know all the information behind all the actions the Bush administration is taking."
'Your' (singular) is paralell with 'we' (plural) which is then paralell with 'a terrorism expert (singular) and then with 'a part of the bush cabinets (plural for furniture, since the cabinet is the group of secretaries, a part of being a single secretary) not to mention being 'a part of' instead of 'a member', which is pralell with we again (still plural) and the whole mess ends with a double use of the word all, which is redundant twice and uneccesary in context even once.
'Admit' is used instead of 'agree', 'that' is uneccesary, and you could admit the entire first two thirds of the sentence and replace it with the words 'No one knows' without significantly altering the statements meaning.
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