Beacause I hate you all.

[Big McLargehuge]

I wrote this


[center:7a1342d087]Heaven on earth never precluded Hell within.
And you bring Hell to me
By not being mine

I should be more fair
With judgment
And take part of the blame.

Because I should be more open
Or at least at times
Speak to you.

But I rather be left alone
So I can write about how
Your face keeps me up at night.

And how thinking of you
Reminds me of
The value of life

But you wouldn’t believe that
And that’s why
I love a face I cannot name[/center:7a1342d087]


I didn't write this because i hate you. I wrote because i forgot a girls name.


I think it starts with a p or s

[Professor Cool]

Sorry, no offense intended, but i could hear morrisey singing that.

Once again, I'm sorry...I'M SO SORRY I-I-I-I-I-I-I-I-I-I'M SOOO SORRY!

[Big McLargehuge]

I had to download that song to know what an asshole you are.

[executioneer]

IT DOESN'T EVEN RHYME D-

-willie

[Protoclown]

Dude,

that's not a poem
rather
it is
a bunch of normal

s e n t e n ces

put together

in faggy

poem
style.

[Big McLargehuge]

Ever heard of free verse ASSHOLE.



Your satire looks like it was written by e. e. cummings

[Protoclown]

You should have seen it before the board took away all my funky spacing.

Free verse is pretty much the only thing I write in, aside from rare moments of insanity where I try something else. No offense dude, but it just doesn't sound very poetic to me.

[Big McLargehuge]

I am offended that you said "no offense dude".

[sadie]

i don't think it's so much the poem is made up of ordinary sentences that makes it seem un-poem-like. it's more that there are no details. poetry is about specifics. plus, the word preclude fits not within the tone of the rest of the piece.

[kellychaos]

Originally Posted by Big McLargehuge

I didn't write this because i hate you. I wrote because i forgot a girls name.


I think it starts with a p or s

Vulva!

Even with e.e. cummings there's a continuity of form and style. :/

[Protoclown]

Originally Posted by sadie

i don't think it's so much the poem is made up of ordinary sentences that makes it seem un-poem-like. it's more that there are no details. poetry is about specifics. plus, the word preclude fits not within the tone of the rest of the piece.

PLUS, IT SUCKS

[Big McLargehuge]

Thank you

[sadie]