would you hire me?

[george]

Objective:

To obtain a position of resposibility within a stable orginization that will allow me to put my strong management and customer service skills to operation in a competitive work enviroment. The ideal job would allow for both team and individual achievement, with plenty of room for personal and professional growth.

Summary of Work Experince:

As a Managed Network Services Project Manager for Sprint I held a position of great responsibility. With little supervision I coordinated the complex task of implementating managed Wide Area Networks (WAN) for both international and domestic customers with an average account billing over ten thousand dollars a month. My duties required that I have exceptional customer service skills, and that I put them to use helping to ensure that the technical designs agreed upon by the customer computer engineers, and the Sprint computer engineers were completed without flaw, within budget, and on time. As the implementation of the customer networks proceeded I provided detailed status reports to my management, sales professionals, customers, and national and international vendors. Settled customer billing disputes and organized weekly meetings to bring together all the disparate elements involved in the WAN implemenation process to foster clear lines of communication. Utilized multiple computer software programs (Microsoft Office suite of programs, specialized data base programs) to provide total coverage of customer accounts.

In my role as Overnight Merchandise Flow Manager for Target Stores I was responsible for a crew of 35 people as well as the over night security of a multi million dollar department store. I handled the scheduling of all night employees. In assigning duties to members of my team, I held sole responsibility for ensuring that every individual understood their assignments and provided supervision, employee review, and career counseling. Teamed with members of the Human Resources division I conducted interviews and wrote position announcements to fill vacant positions. As only manager in the store at night I was part of an aggressive campiagn to prevent stock shrinkage from employee theft, and handled daily money drops with armoured security serivices. In addtion to the daunting task of moving at least two semi trailers of merchandise from stockroom to sale floor in an eight hour period, I also was charged with seasonal and sale display updates. In this capacity I designed window displays, and created end cap, and in store stock dispalys, as well as followed stock display directives issued by the store manager and corporate headquarters.

In the United States Marines I worked as an Aviation Weapons Team Leader. This position was a culmination of a ten year career and was a great honor to hold. I supervised Marines in groups of up to fifteen men in the maintenance of the weapons systems of the F-18 fighter aircraft. My duites included not only the maintenace of the the physical hardware of the aircraft such as the 20mm Vulcan gun system and missile/bomb racks, but the trouble shooting of electrical and computer systems on the aircraft. I held the responsibility of assuring that all maintenance preformed by my Marines was completed properly and conducted Quality Assurance and Safe for Flight inspections. Included with my maintenance duties I worked on the flightline supervisng the highly dangerous mission of loading missiles, bombs, and gun ammunition on aircraft. Once all weapons were loaded, then the task of supervising the safe launch and recovery of the aircraft on flight missions became the primary focus of my position. I was awarded a Navy Achievement medal for performing my duties above and beyond the already exacting standards required not only by the Marine Corps, but also by the inherent danger of handling high explosives and being responsible for the lives of my fellow Marines, the fighter pilots, as well as a thirty million dollar aircraft.

Education:

* Three years of progressive management training through University of Excellence curriculumn offered to select Sprint employees.

* Two years study at Costal Carolina Community College in Jacksonville NC.

* Two years study at Southern Illinois University in Jacksonville NC.

* Attended United States Marine Non-Commissioned Officers Academy.

* Completed over thirty Marine Corps Institute courses ranging from Anti-Terrorisim training to Mathematics, and several mechanical reapair courses including HVAC systems and personal computer hardware.

Throughout my working career I have attempted to take advantage of every educational opportunity available to me through my employers so that I could attain a strong skill set as a manager, and to develop myself as a person. I enjoy the opportunity to aquire new skills, and learn very quickly.

[Carnivore]

I'd hire you if you weren't gay and a ****** :/

[george]

ok, please comment on my resume. not so much for spelling and duplication errors (like putting the twice or some shit), more for what you think content wise, or if there are gramattical errors.

please tell me if there is anything confusing, that could be stated better, or that you feel could be better explained.

i appreciate your help on this. sometimes when writing these stupid resumes it is hard to take a cold hard look at the darn thing and whittle it down to a quick, easy read.



also tell me how you feel about the style. i have been told that the narrative style is becoming very popular because it is easier to read and does not get cluttered up with dates and such that matter little to a manager conducting an interview (only HR wonks care about dates, or so my experience ha been).

thank you for your time

[LegoLars]

yes i would hire you.

gladly.

i would hire your wife and kids as well.

i would hire your mom and dad.

your grandad

and all of your bugs.

i would hire the hair in your shower.

and i would hire the rodents in your basement.

i would hire all things that have touched you.

your soap, your kitchen gear, your sweatshirt and blahblah

[Carnivore]

I am no authority on the subject, but it seems very professional and well-written to me. You use the narrative style very well.

Originally Posted by george

As the implementation of the customer networks proceeded I provided detailed status reports to my management, sales professionals, customers, and national and international vendors. Settled customer billing disputes and organized weekly meetings to bring together all the disparate elements involved in the WAN implemenation process to foster clear lines of communication. Utilized multiple computer software programs (Microsoft Office suite of programs, specialized data base programs) to provide total coverage of customer accounts.

To get picky with grammar, the sentences beginning with "Settled" and "Utilized" are not sentences as they lack a subject. It should be "I settled" and "I utilized" to be correct. You did the same thing in the next paragraph too.

[george]

thank you, i will fix that now.

now bad for a commie ass yankee liberal

[Anonymous]

I would actually ditch the "I" everywhere. Also, you should focus more on accomplishments in each of your positions as opposed to responsibilities. You can either add a section above experience titled something like "Key Accomplishments" and bullet out related projects and accomplishments, or you can work them into your individual job experience paragraphs.

[Anonymous]

Here is how I separate key accomplishments from experience:

OBJECTIVE
To align with a rapid growth company and apply extensive managerial and technical skills in the field of web application design,development, implementation and marketing.

SUMMARY OF QUALIFICATIONS

Nine years experience in the field of Information Technology, web application design and development, GUI/interface design.

Demonstrated ability to consistently and accurately meet and exceed planned project goals and deadlines.

Excellent communicator with ability to build team consensus.

Capacity to work closely with all levels of management on project planning and coordinate the necessary resources to take the project from conceptual phase through successful deployment.

Extensive experience with complete software development life cycle.

Proven track record in anticipating and developing technological solutions for major changes in the industry impacting the company.

KEY ACCOMPLISHMENTS

Project Management: Managed teams ranging in size from 4 to 155 people, with skills including development, graphic design, security, network operations, technical writing, quality assurance, marketing, customer support, configuration management, and sales. Successfully managed over 15 projects through the entire software development cycle.

Vendor Management: Identified, contracted with, integrated and implemented numerous third party products and services which complimented existing products.

Content Management: Managed content for over 360 local web portals represented by over 30 broadband ISP's. Content ranged from national and local news to community services, personal home pages, and customer support. Designed proprietary content delivery system, a comprehensive hybrid of in-house development and Vignette Story Server to serve content from over 30 national vendors, 20 regional providers, and over 500 disparate hyper-local sources.

EXPERIENCE 4/2001 - Present
***************, St. Petersburg, FL
Vice President & CTO

Responsible for creating international Internet strategy inclusive of all marketing, operational, and support based applications and web sites. Identify, contract with, and deploy third party applications and services which compliment existing service offerings. Key accomplishments include conception and design of Med****** SM, an international patient tracking application which allows for physicians in both the U.S. and foreign countries to monitor patients throughout episodic care plans. Assisted in development of business plan in the areas of marketing and IT. Additionally, identified and secured over 600 physician members in Med******, an international physician network.

9/1999 - 4/2001 ****************, Baltimore, MD
Senior Director Web Services

Management responsibility for content creation and delivery of local web portals in over 160 cable modem/DSL markets encompassing 70,000 customers; all global commercial web hosting, development, and related support services; and web sites inclusive of corporate, intranet, and local cable system sales. Activities focused on business requirements documentation, development/implementation project plans, technical documentation, version control, quality assurance, and implementation of all company web applications. Ongoing responsibility for identifying, establishing, and maintaining relationships with numerous third party entities inclusive of content, content management, hosting, customer relationship management and e-community companies. Key accomplishments included the development of a proprietary content management system currently in production in all local city markets, and the implementation of web-based email for over 30 cable MSOs. Other areas of achievement involved creating and implementing in-house training programs, assisting in Cable MSO system conversions, and marketing of all national and international HSA initiatives.

2/1994 - 9/1999
********************, Clearwater, FL
Director Web Development/Electronic Media Mktg.

Overall responsibilities included the development of the corporate Internet/Intranet sites and GUI design for the full portfolio of company applications including web based training and continuing education applications. Hired and trained web development staff and additionally managed technical documentation department. Responsible for performance reviews, staffing and counseling of personnel. Developed and administered $1,500,000 annualized departmental budget and consistently met projections. Appointed by the Board of Directors to serve on the corporate Executive Technology Evaluation Committee (E-Tec). Other duties included database integration and ASP development. As Director of Electronic Media Marketing, a primary accomplishment was the conception, design, development, deployment and continual maintenance of **** Chronicle TM, an interactive, intranet subscriber based directory and related e-commerce web application. Other functions involved programming and development support for the company's Marketing initiatives; the independent design, programming and maintenance of complex Internet based application systems and programs critical to the operating environment; and the provision of technical support to internal staff and external users.

8/1989 - 2/1994 *****************, Columbus, OH
Director Commercial Hardware Sales

Initially sales consultant on part-time basis. Transition to full time employee with responsibility for all corporate client sales as related to hardware and networking solutions. Promoted to department director and was awarded Salesperson of the Month on eleven occasions.

EDUCATION
Ohio State University
College of Business Administration, Marketing
Bachelor's Degree

[Carnivore]

Although it is technically not proper English, I like doing away with the I's completely. Go with it.

[Darryl]

Ironically enough, I am amassing a sqadron of F-18s at this very moment. I always wanted to be a fighter pilot, but I was just to big, and my eyesight was crappy.

As for the content, it looks good to me, but I am not an HR goon. I would say that you should put the "I"s in, because I am a grammar snob. But either way, the entire document shows that you can write coherently.

ok, I'm out of words.

[mburbank]

Nowhere in their does it mention fucking boyscouts.



I'm sure this is just a typograhical error.

[Geggy]

Sorry, you're overqualified for this job.

Just trying to help. :/

[sadie]

most resumes don't utilize paragraph form period.
but it's perfectly acceptable and even recommended to use fragments that begin with action verbs.

[Matt Harty]

I would hire you.

[Anonymous]

Originally Posted by Carnivore

Although it is technically not proper English, I like doing away with the I's completely. Go with it.

Yes it is; the subject is implied.

[sadie]

technically, the only allowable understood subject is you.

[Anonymous]

It won't be hard for you to understand my cleat.

[Protoclown]

I have never seen the narrative style used before, George, but it looks good to me. I keep hearing over and over though that a resume should be no longer than a single page, and this seems like it would be a fair bit longer than that.

[sadie]

your cleat sounds interesting, chojin.

[george]

thanks everyone. i kept the I's, i dont particularly care one way or the other about them, but i liked the way the resume read when i reviewed it, so with a few minor exceptions and changes this is pretty much what i eneded up with.

and proto, one page is the holy grail of resume writing, and easy enough to do, but I am shooting for a nice fat cushy job, and have to seem as special as possible.

[I am Mexican Jewish]

I would not hire you already if you copied it off from some random guy's resume.